28 Mar 2018

Anticipation and Obnoxious Fae Princes.

I wanted to have a good post planned for this week. Maybe some sketches of my characters, a few progress pictures of my ' The Greatest Showman' painting, a book review. Of course all that fell through, so another last minute slapdash post from me.

I've been busy, doing the last minute preparations for a 'Snow White' themed party I am planning for my friend, Elizabeth. We are going to find out if we lost or won 'The Five Poisoned Apples Contest' over fake champagne and candy apples.

It's been a nice distraction for me. Something to put all my nervous energy into. I can't wait to show you guys after it's done.

I was trying to be hopeful, hope is a good thing to have. It's a hard thing to keep a hold of. I'm convinced my story strayed too far from the source material. Or just wasn't what they were looking for. If that does end up being the case I want to be okay with that. I want to still be proud of my story.

It turned out better than I expected. I got amazing feedback, I got some helpful critiques, and another world that I can easily expanded. It wasn't a waste of time either way. I also got my boys! Two irritating fae princes who are polar opposites in every way. Chayse is a shape shifting cat fae, Cynfael is a rich, ego maniac. All of the late nights were worth it simply for them.

I've been writing Cynfael's story lately. I haven't gotten that far in it but I thought I  would share what I have. This is unedited, first draft stuff, go easy.


 Smoke filled the air, and my lungs. A slow poison I chose to indulge, among a few other vices. I blew it out, watching it fill the small space between my father and I. He waved a hand through it, irritation spreading across his face.

I kept smoking, making direct eye contact as I did, to show I cared as little about his comfort as he cared about mine. His eyes steeled. He said nothing, turning his attention instead to the moving landscape outside the car window. There wasn’t much to see, just shadow coated fields, and red light from the fire in the distance.

Chayse was burning his prison down. I envied him, the fact that he could simply burn away his mother’s entanglements, reducing an empire to ashes as if it had been built of paper. If only mine were as easy to burn. I could feel the necklace hidden away in my coat pocket. The blood coated pearls could buy my freedom. I couldn’t run, I would have to settle for retribution.
“She is dead then.” Father’s words were cold and calculating. Free from the slur he had, when he was playing the drunken fool. 

I nodded; the blazing fire was confirmation enough.

He poured himself some scotch, “That bodes well for our business.”

Which just meant more money in his overflowing coffers; I took a long drag, and flicked ash to the ground.

He stared at the ash.

“Whatever will you buy? A small country perhaps,” I crushed out my cigarette, “Oh wait…”

He took a slow sip of the amber liquid.  “Don’t be short-sighted; I’m not looking for more money for your mother and Isabelle to fetter away.” He looked at his cup, “I plan to fund a war.” He slid a round cube of ice into his cup.

I blew more smoke, “A war with whom?” This was the first I heard of it.

“If your Mother has her way, the bloody world,” A thick cough punctuated his words. 










36 comments:

  1. Um, ARE YOU SURE THAT'S A FIRST DRAFT BECAUSE THAT IS AN EPIC SNIPPET!!!

    I felt like I was there, honestly. You're really awesome with description. I hope it goes well for you in the contest. *crosses fingers*

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    1. Thanks Ivie!!! I'm a bit of a perfectionist but my grammar is usually awful.

      Really! Thanks so much, means a lot! <3

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  2. First of all, I wholeheartedly share your excitement/dread over the results. I personally love your story and think its brilliant, and its waaaay closer to the source material than my Red as Blood story. But you're right, Cyn and Chayse are never wasted time.
    I cannot wait to see what you come up with for the party. So exciting.
    This snippet!! I loooooovveeee it. Oh my goodness. This is perfect. I love being in Cyn's head.
    (This is Maddie, by the way. I've somehow locked myself out of my blogger account, which is a real shame, because I was gonna write a post....)

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    1. It's a strange feeling. Thank you! I disagree,I thought you woved the story into your retellings almost seamlessly. I think you have a good chance of winning, and if I see your name I will be freaking out! None of our characters were. Like Zaig love that guy!
      It's got a red, black,and white color theme and a bit circus for my story. A bit rustic for hers.
      Thanks so much! It's been a weird change to actually see the reason to his madness.
      Glad you got that sorted!

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  3. Holy cal, this snippet, Skye!! It was SO VIVID. I loved it!

    Catherine

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    1. Thanks Catherine! Oh vivid, glad to hear that!
      <3

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  4. Oh, Skye! That was a really vivid snippet! You pull off the grungy, smoky feel of your stories so well! I don't think I knew you were writing Cynfael's story? <3

    And you're absolutely right--as amazing as it would be to see your name on the cover this Saturday (I would be so THRILLED for you!!!) you've already succeeded in finishing this story. And meeting Chayse and Cynfael is a big win, if you ask me. ^_^

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    1. Thanks Tracey! I'm so happy, I never know if it's coming across how I want it to. Grungy and smoky is excatly what I was going for :D It's a fairly new development,but I'm having a lot of fun with it. <3

      It would be amazing to see yours as well, you got so close last time. (Same!!!) I keep trying to remind myself yet. He he, the brats! Thanks! :D

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  5. That snippet is awesome!! Great work!!!

    Also, your party sounds awesome. A great way to celebrate. I' anxiously awaiting the announcements, even though I didn't write a story for the contest. There's so many bloggers who did and I would be so thrilled if at least one gets selected. I hope all goes well for you!

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    1. Thanks Sarah! :D

      I hope so, if all goes to plan. It's exciting, I have lots of blogger friends competing,it will be awesome if any of them win. Thanks!

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  6. The snippet! It sounds amazing! <3

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  7. EEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! <---My actual reaction when I saw you were sharing the first part of this story.

    This snippet gave me LIFE. How do you make your characters so full of LIFE? I could see and FEEL Cynfael's and his father's thoughts and feelings and gestures so, SO clearly. I always forget I'm even reading when I read your works. They're so ALIVE. And oh my woooord. Buy a war??? Cyn's family is so messed up. XD

    THANK YOU FOR SHARING!

    Also I am so, so, soooo rooting for you with the Rooglewood contest! I love this story so much and desperately want it out there for the rest of the world to read. BUT, no matter what happens, you SHOULD be proud of it. It was a brilliant, emotional, epic story, and I feel so honored I got to read it. ^_^

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    1. The best kind of reaction!!!

      EEEPPP!!! With Cynfael, he just picks up the pen and writes himself. I'm glad that they seem alive to you. That is everything you want when people read your stories. They really are, I am finding out more about them and they are awful!

      THANKS FOR READING! Your comments mean the world to me!

      Thanks Christine! The support is so nice! That would be really cool. I will try to remember that. Thanks! *hugs* I was so happy to have you read it, you are brilliant at building people's confidence, and one of the most encouraging people I know! :D
      <3333

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  8. This was seriously epic!! *flails*

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  9. Congratulations, Ms. Five Poisoned Apples Winner! I just saw from Tracey’s IG, and I was like “Woah! I read that story.”

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    1. Thanks!! Still havn't processed it.

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  10. CONGRATS, SKYE!! Lila just told me about you winning through google hangouts and I'M SO EXCITED FOR YOU!!! <3 <3

    (Also, Happy Easter. He is RISEN.)

    <3

    ~Ivie

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    1. Thanks Ivie!!! I'm still shocked!! <333

      (He is Risen indeed!)

      <3

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  11. SKYE!SKYE!SKYE!!!

    YOU WON!!

    *proceeds to scream over it* EEEEEEEPPPPPP AAAAAAHHHHHHH EEEEEHHHHHH YOU WON *does a happy
    dance*

    I CANNOT BELIEVE IT. Actually, I can, but ... *waves arms around* I AM SO HAPPY FOR YOU IT FEELS UNREAL *screams some more* ok, sorry. *ahem* CONGRATULATIONS.

    Remember the time I told you I WAS SURE YOU DID AN AMAZING JOB?? WELL. YOU DID. Apparently xD

    SO CONGRATS AGAIN.

    *goes and screams some more, privately*

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    1. XD It's crazy!!! I'm trying to process it!

      *screams with you* EEEEEEPPPPP!!*dancing*

      Me either! I feel like it's a mistake. THANK YOU!!!!! No need to apologize! XD Thanks!!!!

      Yes, I remember! Thanks for all the support! :D I did... I guess... I hope!! ;)

      Thank you again!!!!

      That is what I've been doing for the last two days.

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  12. AAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH, CONGRATS, SKYE!!! THAT IS AWESOME, I JUST FOUND OUT AND I'M SO HAPPY FOR YOU!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! <333

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    1. THANK YOU!!!! It's surreal! <333333

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  13. YOU WON, YOU WON, YOU WON, AND I CAN'T STOP BEING INCREDIBLY EXCITED FOR YOU!!!!! *screams for a million years* A GINORMOUS CONGRATULATIONS, SKYE, AND I CAN'T WAIT TO READ YOUR BEAUTIFUL-SOUNDING STORY!!!!

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    1. OMIGOODNESS,THANK YOU!!!!!*screams with you* THANK YOU SO MUCH!!!!
      The fact that people will be able to read it still hasn't sunk in yet!
      <3

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  14. CONGRATULATIONS SKYE!!!!! YOU'VE WON AND I'M SO HAPPY FOR YOU!! *POPS THE SODA BOTTLE AND BRINGS OUT CAKE*

    Catherine

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    1. THANKS CATHERINE!!!! XD YESSS Cake!!!!

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  15. *SCREAMS*
    *TRUMPETS*
    *CONFETTI GUNS*


    YOU WON! YOU WON! YOU WON! YOU WON! YOU WON!

    CAN'T WAIT TO SEE YOUR AMAZING STORY IN PRINT :p

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    1. XD

      I still can't believe it!!!

      THANK YOU!!! <3

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  16. Well, this was a pleasant surprise to stumble upon this morning! MORE story from you! Wow. So cool!

    -Rachel Kovaciny, aka Hamlette

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    1. I'm glad you liked it! Thanks Rachel!
      :D

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  17. CONGRATS!!!!!!! I can't wait to read your story!!! It sounds amazing!!!!

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    1. Thank you!!! I hope you enjoy it! :D

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  18. I love the excerpt! Just chilling! And the extra glance into the workings of their world: it seems so intricate.

    Can't wait to see more! :D


    Alexa
    thessalexa.blogspot.com
    verbosityreviews.com

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    1. Thanks! I was hoping for that feeling! I've been developing it, it keeps growing which is nice.

      If all goes well :D

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